What do you think of this pome?

The Muse dropped in for a short visit, and whither goest the Muse, thither I must follow.








You are the apple of my eye,


You are the kumquat of my kidney.


I love you more than pie,


From here all the way to Sydney.

What do you think of this pome?
You are the Tangerine of my spleen


the avocado of my bravado


I wish that I could tell you more


so maybe we will talk tomorrow





I think your Muse thithered to my mouse... I have a bemused computer appliance!
Reply:Kumquat May this is my offer....





You are the peach in my blanc mange


The lemon in my meringue


The pips in my French Or-ange


You're more exotic than east Da-nang





You are sweet as the herbs in my quiche


As blended as the squash in my fridge


More delightful than a mascerating peach


As splendid as the great London Bridge
Reply:line 1-cliche


line 3-cliche


rework


poems dont have to rhyme


express what you want to say without the rhyming because It's not working that well for this poem. Just make sure the beat and the flow is consistent





the beat doesnt flow.
Reply:Facetious are we?


L! cliche 8


L2 kumquat humor 9


L3 not saying much unless pie addict 6


L4 relevance stretched 8





As I munch my apple 6


an eye your pome 4


my mind plans an answer 6


apple 1 and? 4





Overall, not bad for a kumquat poem! lol
Reply:And when they sing their opera,


I will return to you,


switch direction and affection


to that place called Timbuktu
Reply:Great use of rhyme.





Very funny. I liked it. Two thumbs up.





Fun for the family, and kids of all ages.





This movie will have you laughing all the way home.
Reply:Maybe i should drop by for a short visit to Sydney sometimes... It's not that far from where i live! Just an 8hours' flight. =)
Reply:I checked the rules. "One star for each kumquat."
Reply:A real peach of a poem


A plum of rhyming verse


Other poets: you showed 'em


At your abundance of talent they curse!
Reply:great.... ;-)
Reply:She sounds delicious.
Reply:I think I'll go get something to eat ...